Evaluation of the Pitch
Above is our original pitch. We started planning our opening speech by taking key words/ideas from the idea of our film and strain them together into a short piece of text, these keywords are in red. We felt this communicated our message very accurately and also precisely, however the last line caused confusion amongst some members of the audience who felt the last line, 'and end it all once and for all' suggested suicide from the character. Subsequently we have decided to change this line to 'and end the rivalry once and for all'. Below is what the new pitch would look like.
During our pitch we also experienced trouble naming the exact locations that we would film in, something which we will need to improve on for our second pitch as in the real world no investor would pump money into a film with relatively loose ideas. This also meant we would have to think about the cast. The following posts on characters and locations will give a more detailed picture on these aspects.
MARK: GREEN
TEACHER: SOUTHWORTH
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